Peer Review 2

     In this peer review I felt like it was my best for the method 1.  Jade came prepared with outlined points that she wanted to argue. It helped me as a writer find high points and low points to an argument. I hope my comments guided her to connect ideas to her best.

Method 1 Peer Review Worksheet

Reviewer: Jade Deschamps                                  Other Group Members: Madeline Ott (myself)

Date: October 30, 2013

            Each writer should begin by reading his/her material aloud. As you listen to the essay being read, write down any points, comments, suggestions, or questions you might have. After the material has been read, you will all discuss its strengths and how it might be improved. The writer may also mention any particular concerns he or she has about the essay at this point. Offer feedback to each of your group members on the paper’s strengths and areas for improvement.

Positive Comments:

-Paper is outlined very well

-Each point is clearly stated

-Each point is followed by supported facts/statements/materials

-The argument itself is clearly stated along with the position she is taking

-Your opposition is very good, you really present the ideas well of the arguments that one may have against your own argument

-The statistics provided under part 2 section 5 are very effective.  Seeing numbers and the increase of prices over a period time creates a sense of truth, I believe what you are saying.

Improvement Comments:

-I would suggest putting in testimonies from farmers that have been sued by Monsanto to really capture the emotion and significance this has on the farmers lifes.

Overall the outline you presented to me today is very good.  Your paper is clear and to the point, you have everything organized and I believe you are ready to put it all together!